Making better posts

Hi ,
Today we had to go through our own blogs and to check what we would want to make better so it is interesting for people in the world to see. I chose the tour around my blog that one was the most important one because everyone that visits this blog must watch the video. Firstly I used the rubric that showed me exactly what to put on my new posts.

This is the post that I made better.

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FOOTBALL ZONES

This term my favourite part was soccer zones because soccer is my favourite sport

 and I love competing with other soccer teams. I have started playing soccer 

ever since I was six years old. At the tournament we lost no games and no teams 

even scored one goal on us. I play for an actual soccer club it is called three kings united.

My Blog treaty

Hi we had been learning about a Blog treaty.

I must always show my learning, connecting with others is another thing .

Always when you do a post about your learning it might actually be helping others

and all the other things that my blog is for and what I must ensure, it is all on the treaty.