Improving comments

Hi there
today we were doing cyber smart we were improving peoples comments.
What we had to do was to go find comments in a page that looked like this. 
Then we copy and pasted the comments and went to this page, 
we wrote the comment in the first box then we
wrote another comment in the other box but more improved like what i have done in the page on top.
We then had to go back to the blog where we got the the comment from and publish our own improved comment.

What makes a good comment?

Today we were doing cyber smart. For cyber smart we were writing about, what makes a good comment? 

We went to a little slide that had two videos, they had all the information about what makes a good comment. One of the video was from america and the other one was from the UK. They gave us a lot of information so we had a go at writing all our points on to a pad-let so other people can see on our own blogs. Some of the points they gave us, we had already covered but it was good to go over what we had learnt.

Making better posts

Hi ,
Today we had to go through our own blogs and to check what we would want to make better so it is interesting for people in the world to see. I chose the tour around my blog that one was the most important one because everyone that visits this blog must watch the video. Firstly I used the rubric that showed me exactly what to put on my new posts.

This is the post that I made better.

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after

FOOTBALL ZONES

This term my favourite part was soccer zones because soccer is my favourite sport

 and I love competing with other soccer teams. I have started playing soccer 

ever since I was six years old. At the tournament we lost no games and no teams 

even scored one goal on us. I play for an actual soccer club it is called three kings united.

My Blog treaty

Hi we had been learning about a Blog treaty.

I must always show my learning, connecting with others is another thing .

Always when you do a post about your learning it might actually be helping others

and all the other things that my blog is for and what I must ensure, it is all on the treaty.

Welcome

Welcome to my learning journey.